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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #30 on: December 03, 2011, 10:39 AM »
I'd read them if my eyes wouldn't close each time they get in contact with those colours.
Sry wat colour can't you take? Shall I change the yellow or green

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #31 on: December 03, 2011, 12:17 PM »
Yellow is kind of hard to read for me. Don't mind the green.



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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #32 on: December 03, 2011, 01:16 PM »
Yellow is kind of hard to read for me. Don't mind the green.
Awwww but the yellow is the official star wars opening text... :)
I'll change it soon...on an iPod ATM so I'll got on laptop later and change

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #33 on: December 05, 2011, 08:06 AM »
Nice additions to your story Padawan Tomius.

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #34 on: December 05, 2011, 08:23 AM »
Nice additions to your story Padawan Tomius.

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thank you mroe to come

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #35 on: December 06, 2011, 04:46 PM »
Part IV of the Story of Tomius:
In a galaxy far, far away...

With Corscant still in sith control,
Tomius has journeyed to the lower city, 
However, a sith patrol has pursued him,
Tomius now awakes after being knocked unconscious...


A crumbling ceiling starred back at Tomius as he awoke. Aching, stiff and uncomfortable, Tomius sat up and tried to remember what had happened. 

He had been chased by a determined group of sith. They had almost succeeded in capturing him, had it not been for some unknown event which must have ended up with him sitting up in a squeaky bed, located in what looked like a make shift hospital wing in an old storage room. 

After observing his surroundings Tomius scratched his sore head in confusion. However instead of his hand making contact with his forehead, it touched the rough fabric of a bandage. Even more curious and scared, Tomius lept out of bed searching for answers. 

There were no clues to where he was or how he got there. Also , his possessions seem to have been misplaced. So, Tomius seeing no further use of staying in the dull room, Tomius decided to explore the rest of the place. 

As Tomius got into the hallway which was in similar condition to the room he was just in, he bumped into a small man. Tomius yelped and jumped back in shock whilst the tiny figure laughed at the frightened boy.

After Tomius recovered from the shock and the small man got over what was apparently a funny sight, the mysterious stranger explained everything to Tomius. It turned out that the chase Tomius was in did not go unnoticed by the 'bottom dwellers' as the man put it. Thinking that it as another invading sith patrol, they had fired upon the group with a powerful EMP burst to knock out anyone and deactivate any electrical device. This resulted in all of them being captured by this gang. 

However, it was soon apparent Tomius was not part of the sith patrol, explained the man. And Tomius had been sent to the hospital in the care of Dr Alverous Migeto, the man Tomius was Listening to. Alverous then went on to describe Tomius injuries. All were minor and the bandage on Tomius's head was to stop a small cut getting infected. This then brought Alverous to the current situation. 

However, he was not finished. The doctor quickly told Tomius the gang leader wanted to see him urgently. The doctor refused to tell Tomius anything else, so he reluctantly followed the doctor through the mysterious corridors, once again not knowing what lies ahead...
« Last Edit: December 06, 2011, 05:06 PM by *<JO>*Tomius »

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #36 on: December 08, 2011, 11:47 AM »
Part V of the Story of Tomius:
In a galaxy far, far away...

The time for escape is getting closer.
Tomius has found refuage in a hideout,
Belonging to an infamous gang of corscant.
Tomius is about to find out what the gang wants.


Tomius followed avlerous down what seemed like hundreds of long, dark cooridors. Devoid of life and light, Tomius felt affraid and lonely in the place and would surely of gotten lost if not for the old doctor leading the way.

After an hour of walking in silence, the pair eventually reached a thick, steel blast door with two menicing guards standing either side. They glared at Tomius as the old doctor appoached them. Alverous quickly whisperd to one of the guards and they quickly ran over to the ancient controls to open the tightly sealed blast door.

Once the inpenitrable door was opened, Tomius's guide beckoned him inside. Tomius obeyed. What Tomius saw next overwelmed him. Everywhere he looked were armed merceneries and thugs, cleaning their guns, playing cards or glaring at anyone who dared to make eye contanct. suddenly, Tomius felt much more at danger and quickened his pace to keep up with Alverous.

Once the pair had walked the length of the hall, they reached a smaller door. The old man knocked. After a minute which seemed like an hour, the door finally opened, but only slightly. A rough voice barked out the door. Alverous answered. He mumbled something. It seemed like a password was required to enter this room. The mysterious figured opened the door and revelled himself as another thug.
 
Tomius and Alverous entered the room. This room was completely the oppsoite. Instead of thugs and merceneries everywhere, only a couple of figures occupied the room. Instead of crumbling walls and broken furniture, the room was pristine and in perfect condition. A huge, shiny desk stood in the very centre of the room. Various papers, maps and strategic tools lay on the table. This room was a preperation room for the gang.

A huge man aproached Tomius. A hand appeared from under his heavy coat. Tomius, thinking that the hulky figure was going to hit him, jumped back and raised his fists. The huge man laughed. It was a menacing, evil laugh that made the hairs on the back of Tomius's neck stand on end. The rest of the room burst into laughter. Eventually, the moment passed and the tall man spoke to Tomius.

He explained that he was the leader of the 'botton dwellers' and they had been driving imperial forces out of the lower levels of corscant. However, they stood no chance against the full might of the sith empire so needed to escape. They explained that they are planning a daring attempt, using all ships at thier disposale to break through the blockade and find a new home. The man went on to explain that Tomius could join them in escpaing the planet.

However Tomius knew this sounded a bit too good to be true, and was proven right when the leader of the gang told Tomius what he must do in return. They had seen Tomius's 'talents' and reactions when he was getting chased by the sith. They were amazed by his skill and instincts. The leader explained that they lacked a great pilot to lead the gangs small fleet. This is where Tomius came in. They wanted him to lead the fleet through the blockade to saftey.

Tomius was very uncomfortable at this idea. He had never flown an actual ship, though he had learnt in a simulation, and was no leader. Howver he also knew that this may be his only chance to escape the planet, so he relecantly accepted the terms. Over the next few hours, Tomius and the gangs leaders planned and calculated how the fleet will preceed and any tactics they will need to execute in certian emergencies. As the hours went by, Tomius sensed something through the force. He hushed everyone in the room...a small trembling sound echoched around the whole building.

Tomius looked outside the preperation room door. All the merceneries and thugs had suddenly looked up from what they were doing to try figure out what the noice was. It went silent...not even a whisper broke the silence...the trembling stopped...someone coughed...seconds passed...then BOOM!!!!

A huge explotion errupted from the side of the great hall. All the merceneries within the vicinty of the explotion were incinerated or thrown against the wall on the oppsoite side of the hall. The rest of the figures in the room armed themselves and aimed at the centre point of the explotion. A thick cloud of dust had covered the huge whole that had suddenly appeared in the halls wall. Tomius took out his pistol from his back pocket. Alverous had somehow aquired a blaster rifle and joined Tomius, along with the gang leader. Ruble had filled the hall. Minutes past since the explosion.

The gang leader ordered a small group of thugs to investigate the hole. They obeyed their leader and walked up to the hole cautiosly. Nothing could be seen in the darkness of the hole. They slowly entered and soon disappeared from sight. Moments later one of the thugs flew out the hole...dead. A red beam appeared in the darkness...it steadly got closer. Out of curiousity no one moved, wondering what this mysterious light was. As the beam got closer a shadowy figure appeared. And then  the truth finally set in...it was a sith.
Just as the sith got to the exit of the hole. Hundreds more beams of red light appeared with in it. As the gang looked at the light in fear. Another almightly crash broke the silence.

Above them another explosion had occured and out of the dust, imperial soliders came absaling down on ropes. Immediatly the gangs started firing. The battle had begun...

Though the gang was powerful, this sudden assualt had caught them off guard. They had no strategy. No tactic. It seemed to turn to every man for itself. The sith warriors who had first arrived were slaughtering anyone who got in their way. Nothing could stop them. They deflected bullets, jumped over groups of enemies and cut down their enemies using their legendary lightsabers. They shot bolts of lightning at the experienced soliders and they fell like leaves on a tree in autum. The imperial soliders had also had their fair share in the slaughter, being more of a nuicanse though rather than a real threat.

Throughout the battleso far, Tomius remained with Alverous and the gang leader. They had been holding their own and had been shuffling slowing towards the exit of the hall...towards the hanger. Tomius had reframed from tyring to shoot anyone by hiding behind the gang leader, who seemed to enjoy the bloodshed. As the three of them approached the exit. Alverous suddenly flew into the air and zoomed towards the battle. Tomius tracked the old man and then suddenly a red beam protruded through the old doctors chest. Alverous fell on the floor dead, replaced by the face of a sniggering sith. The gang leader immediatly fired upon the fearsome warrior, but his efforts were not enough.

the sith delfected and dogded the bullets with ease and ran at the huge man. The leader threw his gun on the floor and drew out a knife. He also charged. The two met in the middle and started to duel, the gang leader doing his best to dogde the lightsaber, the sith trying to mow him down. Though the gangs leader was brave, it was soon obvious who would win. The sith had the force as a weapon. And nothing could match that.

The sith jumped over the huge man and used the force to send a power lightning bolt at the man. The leader was thrown right against the wall near tomius, dead. The sith then looked for his next target...and found Tomius.
« Last Edit: December 08, 2011, 01:16 PM by *<JO>*Tomius »

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #37 on: December 08, 2011, 01:16 PM »
Good additions interesting story.  :)

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #38 on: December 08, 2011, 01:18 PM »
Thanks Master. :)

I have one final part planned :o
It will be released after the end of early access. :)
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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #39 on: December 08, 2011, 03:24 PM »
Awesome story!!

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Re: Story of Tomius
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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #41 on: January 16, 2012, 10:59 AM »
Part VI of The Story of Tomius.

Final Part.

Special thanks to Master Narretas for all your help!


In a galaxy far, far away…

It is mayhem in the lower levels of Corscant!
A viscous battle has begun between the gangs and the Sith Empire.
With the Sith Empire clearly winning,
Tomius is trying to escape the battle with his life.
However, one Sith Warrior has other plans…


An evil face glares at Tomius, laughing at his next victim. Tomius backs away, frightened to the very core. He had seen what the Sith were capable of and had no intention to be here, to find for himself.
The small Twi’lek boy ran with determination for the door out of the great hall.

Just as Tomius was about to exit the corpse littered hall, he looked back at the deathly, on-going battle. The hall has been destroyed. The gang annihilated. The mass of bodies are now mostly the colours of red and black…the colour of the Sith. Tomius gazes quickly for survivors as he starts backing towards the door. The only ones lucky enough to survive the onslaught were now running terrified from the evil army or surrendering, hoping to be spared. However it was obvious none would. Sith warriors had executed any foolish to surrender to them.

Feeling too scared to feel sorrow or remorse for the dead, Tomius ran out of the hall with the evil Sith close behind.  Tomius ran faster than he ever knew he could. He was running for his life. The Sith cackled with pleasure and continues the hunt.

Worry seeped in as Tomius realised he was lost. There were numerous corridors and passages he could take. The Sith was catching him up and he only had a rusty, old pistol to defend himself with.
Tomius panicked as he ran. He was getting tired. He looked back at the Sith. His black armour glistened against the white corridors. A deathly, red lightsaber was ignited in his right hand.  On his face was a twisted, mad smile. It petrified Tomius. How could something so evil and deadly smile like that.

Tomius continued to run, finding strength from inside himself. But no matter how fast he run, how many turns he took, the Sith was always behind him, slowly catching him up. As every second pass, Tomius heard the humming of the Sith’s lightsaber get louder.

Just as Tomius thought he could not run anymore, he saw the door to the hanger. By sheer luck he had stumbled across it and it motivated him to escape unharmed. Using what energy he had left he sprinted towards the door. However a voice cackled “Oh no you don’t, you little brat!”

Tomius saw something fly over his head. In front of him landed the triumphant Sith. Tomius had to skid to a halt to avoid bashing into the bulky figure. As he stood still in shock and dread, the Sith raised his deadly lightsaber, ready to strike Tomius down.

At that very moment, a power surged with in Tomius. It felt strangely familiar yet alien to him. Instincts took over and Tomius channelled that store of energy out of his hands towards the Sith. The strength of the push was enough that the Sith went flying into some cargo boxes on the other side of the ancient hanger. Once more Tomius felt hopeful that he could escaped. He legged it to one for the many old ships. ‘If he could just get inside and take off, he would be safe,’ Thought Tomius.

However, Tomius’s hopes were crushed. He felt a ulmightly force slam into him, sending him flying against the near concrete wall. Tomius slammed into it. Pain from the impact with the hard wall momentarily clouded his mind. He had broken his arm in the collision.

Tomius opened his tired eyes. He saw the Sith striding towards him, cackling uncontrollably.

“Well, well, well. What do we have here?” mocked the Sith. “Looks like we will be having some fun, young Jedi!”

Tomius looked at the terrible Sith with confusion and fear. Why did the Sith call him a Jedi? And what was he going to do to him?

The Sith ignited his destructive lightsaber once more. He carefully pointed it at Tomius’s terrified face and laughed as he moved it closer, towards his eye. The Sith Sliced gently down from Tomius’s eyebrow to his cheek. Tomius had never felt so much awful pain and could not help but scream. Blood dripped from the wound and his flesh burnt.

Tomius’s pain encouraged the Sith and he cackled even more. Tomius closed his eyes as the Sith raised his weapon once more.

“You are weak, Jedi. And the weak do not deserve to live. I shall put you out of your…” Started the Mocking Sith, but he did not finish and an almighty smack echoed around the hall. Tomius opened his uninjured eye. He saw the tall Sith fall to the ground with a thud, unconscious. The evil, dreadful face was soon replaced by a smiling, cheeky face of an older Twi’lek. He held a hi-tech pistol upside down in his hand, which he must of used to hit the Sith.

“Aren't you a clumsy one?” Laughed Tomius’s Saviour, pointing at him. “I am Narretas Skylek, and who are you my silly little friend?”

“T…T…Tomius.” He stuttered, still shocked at what he had just witnessed.

Narretas looked at Tomius and tutted, “What are we going to do with you?”

The Sith stirred at the cocky Twi’lek’s feet. Narretas quickly pulled out a scattergun from under his coat and shot the Sith once in the back. The body lay still.

“Here, clean yourself up” Commanded Narretas as he threw Tomius a bacta pack.

Tomius barely caught the pack as it tumbled through the air. As Tomius tried to clean and heal himself, Narretas started to fumble around in the Sith’s pockets. The Twi’lek then stood up, with what look like credentials and a key card in this hand.
“So not only did you kill him, you are now thieving from him?” questioned Tomius.

Narretas looked at Tomius and laughed. “This is our ticket out of here my little friend, and I wouldn’t complain…I could have left him to kill you.”

Tomius remained quiet at this answer and merely stood up with whatever energy he has left.

“Follow me Tomius, we are going to steal this guy’s ship and get out of Corscant.” Instructed Narretas.

Tomius obeyed Narretas and they both made their way out of the lower cities of Corscant, using Narretas’s Stealth belt to go undetected. They found the Sith’s ship parked on then outskirts of the ruins of the Jedi temple. Narretas used the key card, that he stole, to unlock the ship and they both boarded.

Tomius went straight to the medical bay to see if he could find anything to ease the pain the Sith caused. However he found nothing. Narretas started up the engines and took off. As the ship gained speed, Tomius felt his fatigue and lied down in a neatly made bed in the medical bay.  From what Narretas told him when he woke up, they managed to get through the huge Sith blockade around Corscant without a problem, thanks to the credentials Narretas Stole. Narretas has then travelled swiftly to Tython.

Tomius and Narretas left the ship and made their way to the Jedi Temple. There they parted ways.  As Tomius was aboiut to walk into the ancient temple, Narretas pointed at him and said “I’ll see you later.” With that Narretas zoomed off in his ship. Up to what? No one knows. Though he would later return, to get his missions from the council.
 Meanwhile Tomius had requested the council that he’d be accepted by the Jedi Order and to be trained…Just as the dead Jedi had said.  His destiny had started to unfold as he took his life in a new direction….To become a Jedi Knight.

3 Years Later…
Tomius happily walked out of the ancient Jedi temple. Master Atticus had just told him someone wished to speak to him outside. Tomius was very curious as to you, so immediately  followed Master Atticus’s Instructions. As he got about side he stared at the scenery of Tython. It had always stunned him how beautiful it was. Huge Mountains stood in the distance and giant green trees loomed overhead. The sound of the flowing river could be heard and the grass swayed gently in the fresh mourning breeze. Tomius loved it here and did not wish to leave. However his time on Tython was drawing to a close.

Over the past years, he had been training hard and finally could control the force and had become a fair duellist. He had learnt the ways of the Jedi and had the chance to further his education.

As Tomius drifted off into further daydream, he heard someone shout:

“Hey, Tomius, come here you daft git!”

Tomius turned around to see Narretas pointing at him, smiling cheekily.  He walked down the concrete steps, over to his old friend and bowed like the Masters had told him he should.

“Let’s go on my ship, I need a word.” Said Narretas swiftly.
Tomius followed him onto his ship. As Tomius studied it he thought it looked a bit old and rusty. But he decided to hold his tongue…for nows.
Narretas and Tomius made their way to the little bar, where he was poured a drink by Narretas. He sipped his drink and waited for Narretas so speak.

“Your training approaches and the council has asked me to be your Master. I am glad I can get to know you better and guide you so that one day, you'll be a fine Jedi.” Narretas said seriously. “What do you say my little friend?”

“I would love to learn from you! I promise I won’t disappoint you.” Exclaimed Tomius.

“As long as you listen to me, and try your best you will never disappoint me.” Stated Narretas. “Before we go on, do you have any questions?”

“I do have one, Master Narretas” said Tomius. “Why did you agree to take me as your padawan?”

Narretas cheeks went red as he blushed. His eyes refused to meet Tomius’s and gazed around the room. “Well….erm…The money of course…I’m getting paid tons for doing this!” Said Narretas with a nervous laugh.

However, Tomius already knew his real reason. Narretas loved the Jedi Order, even though he would not admit it, and he would do anything to help out.

And with that, Tomius took his first steps as a padawan learner. To hopefully become a fine Jedi Knight to serve the Jedi order with his life…

The End of the Story of Tomius

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #42 on: January 16, 2012, 11:12 AM »
Great story Padawan Tomius. :)

You should write more of them! I like how you characterize me, and yourself.

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Re: Story of Tomius
« Reply #43 on: January 16, 2012, 11:15 AM »
Great story Padawan Tomius. :)

You should write more of them! I like how you characterize me, and yourself.

I couldn't of done it without you Master!  :D Thanks, and I'll think about it. What more do I have to write about?  :)