Jedi Order -=Year 243=-

Jedi Order Temple => Other Star Wars stuff => Lore and Legend - Star Wars => : ChrisGrim March 28, 2009, 12:46 PM

: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim March 28, 2009, 12:46 PM
As it goes on I expect some people to want to say something, so here is where to get that going.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: *<JO>*Narretas March 29, 2009, 01:44 AM
Nice! Write more so that I can read more ;) lol
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim March 29, 2009, 09:12 AM
Nice! Write more so that I can read more ;) lol

I should be posting Chapter 2 and 3 today.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: *<JO>*Narretas March 29, 2009, 10:24 AM
Sounds good!
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: Vairo March 29, 2009, 07:01 PM
It looks good..the last bit sort of reminded me of Anakin v. Obi Wan, though.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim March 29, 2009, 07:04 PM
It looks good..the last bit sort of reminded me of Anakin v. Obi Wan, though.

The last bit is a piece of a much earlier peace done as I left the clan and posted in SoP before Drake-tar deleted the forums. And, to be fair, it's **** near impossible to write a convincing Master vs. Padawan fight without sounding like Anakin and Obi-Wan... I tried several different ways and it all came the same way, especially in the context of the story (Grim leaving the Jedi Order to join a Sith Order)... Honestly, if I could have made it different, made it not sound like that, I would have.

EDIT: I tried re-writing that piece, so hopefully it's a little less Revenge of the Sith. Since it was never posted in this forum no one can really know what was said but me, so I can change it at will, lol.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: *<JO>*Menelaos March 30, 2009, 06:28 AM
WOOHOO!

Alright, haven't read it yet...will be doing so as the day goes one while i can sneak peaks in and out.

I soooo better be in there as one ass kicking Master!!!

Regards,
Menelaos
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim April 01, 2009, 03:41 AM
Chapters 4 and 5 are up, 6 is being worked on.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: Vairo April 06, 2009, 10:54 AM
I really like the new stuff.  Keep going, I enjoy reading this.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: *<JO>*Shin-Tetsu April 08, 2009, 12:45 PM
WOOHOO!

Alright, haven't read it yet...will be doing so as the day goes one while i can sneak peaks in and out.

I soooo better be in there as one ass kicking Master!!!

Regards,
Menelaos

Your dead so your judokick would go through everyone.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim April 08, 2009, 01:18 PM
WOOHOO!

Alright, haven't read it yet...will be doing so as the day goes one while i can sneak peaks in and out.

I soooo better be in there as one ass kicking Master!!!

Regards,
Menelaos

Your dead so your judokick would go through everyone.

He makes a valid point.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: Pippin Toppleton April 11, 2009, 05:55 PM
^_^ Finally someone wrote something!  *applauds*

I really like it, good writing, good story.
: Re: Road to Redemption (Discussion)
: ChrisGrim April 11, 2009, 08:04 PM
^_^ Finally someone wrote something!  *applauds*

I really like it, good writing, good story.

Thank you.

I'm looking to hopefully work on it more tomorrow, maybe complete it. I don't know where I'm going to take this 'You are the Sith Lord, Jedi Chris' storyline, I just liked the nice contradiction it gave and that it means Chris will further have to pay for his decisions as Grim/Duplicity. Kind of like... a reminder that no matter what we do we're always haunted by the decisions we make.