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Offline *<JO>*KarrXon

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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #30 on: May 04, 2009, 03:34 AM »
Just got done with the next bit... pretty big chunk, but a lot happens and I really like it. Let me know what you think!  ;D
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Offline *<JO>*Narretas

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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #31 on: May 04, 2009, 03:49 AM »
Waaa! Awesome :D

Karr's Force Unleashed!

I hope Bulgren's happy with you :P
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #32 on: May 04, 2009, 08:05 AM »
The new part's great, Master!
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #33 on: May 04, 2009, 10:18 AM »
You know I have always loved your stories...I just think that Master Menelaos should be the star in them ALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Who is Ekul anyway? Was he a member or JO??

Regards,
Menelaos
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Offline *<JO>*Vargus.Traspro

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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #34 on: May 04, 2009, 02:31 PM »
I liked the build up to the small finale....

The unecessarily fast and epic way you destroyed those gunships was a bit silly after you drew your saber into the air it kinda went downhill for me....

The speed of which you destroyed those gunships was a bit unreal? could of drawn it out i think......
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Offline *<JO>*KarrXon

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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #35 on: May 04, 2009, 11:40 PM »
I see your point, Vargus. I wrote that pretty late at night and I think I was tired and wanted to wrap up that segment as soon as I could. I'll revise it; thanks for the genuine feedback!... but now I have to KILL you!... haha nah, I'm just kidding... or am I?... *cocks an eyebrow*
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #36 on: May 05, 2009, 01:08 AM »
There, it's revised, and I like this one much more! I hope you do too! Unfortunately there isn't really an easy way to drag out a fairly quick event; I do that enough as it is and I don't want to get too convoluted. Even in movies, most of the actual action doesn't take very long at all; we just get so focused that it seems to happen slower. I'm still interested in your feedback, though!
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #37 on: May 05, 2009, 01:22 AM »
Hm, this new part is more realistic, I like it better :)
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #38 on: May 05, 2009, 09:01 AM »
brilliant brilliant ^^

i like it alot!
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #39 on: May 05, 2009, 11:44 AM »
I like it a lot too!
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #40 on: May 06, 2009, 11:00 AM »
Glad you liked it. I'll add more soon.
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #41 on: May 07, 2009, 01:45 AM »
And after any pulse-quickening, mind-bending, suspense-hanging action scene there is a COMPULSORY boring scene where the writer has explain what the hell all just happened... haha
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #42 on: May 07, 2009, 06:01 AM »
awesome
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #43 on: May 07, 2009, 06:10 AM »
Agreed :D
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Re: The Nemesis Discussion
« Reply #44 on: May 10, 2009, 03:24 AM »
I like GR-58...  ;D
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